Wallace Paper Finished-Unsatisfied

[Galician]

Well done! I too knew nothing of the man other than what I had seen in the movie (which did not impress me, btw). I thought you did a good job navigating between myth and man, or at least illustrating the issue.

One small question, might your sources give any indication as to which order the friars sent to seek Wallace's surrender belonged?

[Archangel]

Give you a hint on the ancient Scottish Art of Procrastination ( as opposed to amateurcrastination): learn a writing structure pattern.

I'll be reading your work this afternoon but having travelled this road many times, I can say that my work has been saved by structure.

All writing has to follow a pattern and history is just one subject. Once you have a structure, then it's easy to assemble the pieces quickly. The first and last paragraphs should be roughly the same so write the opening thesis at the end, once you've got there.

It's a skill you may need later on, I do.

If you haven't got the time management habit at your age, you're probably not going to. No problem, just find out how you've survived so far and refine those skills. Works for me.

[Archangel]

Okay, I read it. Pretty good. It does feel hurried and you could have made that work for you.

There was a couple of themes you could have played with but linear history is always safe.

The critique my harsh mom would have given me? Everybody is born young, it's safe to say Wallace was too.

All in all, I know first hand how hard it is to do a simple history of anything in Scotland. Somehow, there is always a great tangle to undo before you can weave your story. Even more so when you have to direct it to a North American audience.

Good job.

[sharpdressedscot]

I'd give it a B-, but that's just me. I think you did well considering it was a bit slipshod and hurried.

[cacunn]

Give you a hint on the ancient Scottish Art of Procrastination ( as opposed to amateurcrastination): learn a writing structure pattern.

I spent 7 years as a stand-up instructor for the Department of Defense. Our process was:

1. Tell the class what you are going to tell them
2. Tell them
3. Tell them what you told them.

I've gotten into the same habit when writing. summary - one or two paragraph overview hitting all the high points. Then the body that fleshes out the outline from the summary and then restate the original summary as if it is a fact and your point has already been accepted.

The most important parts are the beginning and ending summary. The beginning not only sets up your premise it puts an outline of what you are about to write into your mind. The ending summary is the last thing your reader will see and most likely what they will remember.

I liked the work. It needed to sit for a few days and then be reread and proofed, but then if it were not for the last minute I would not get anything done either.

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[macwilkin]

I spent 7 years as a stand-up instructor for the Department of Defense. Our process was:

1. Tell the class what you are going to tell them
2. Tell them
3. Tell them what you told them.

I've gotten into the same habit when writing. summary - one or two paragraph overview hitting all the high points. Then the body that fleshes out the outline from the summary and then restate the original summary as if it is a fact and your point has already been accepted.

The most important parts are the beginning and ending summary. The beginning not only sets up your premise it puts an outline of what you are about to write into your mind. The ending summary is the last thing your reader will see and most likely what they will remember.

I liked the work. It needed to sit for a few days and then be reread and proofed, but then if it were not for the last minute I would not get anything done either.

:

That's the same basic outline we use in online classes; the five paragraph model.

T.

[Scotus]

The Comyns have been much maligned over the years by pro-Bruce propagandists

...and the Understatement of the Year Award goes to... Cajunscot!

Little is mentioned, for example, of John Comyn's defeat of Edward II at the Battle of Roslin in 1303

Edward I was still alive at the time, but the point is the same. John Comyn was one of the greatest defenders of Scotland. The problem was that his important allies came to terms with King Edward. He could do nothing more, and had to submit to King Edward himself. The Red Comyn insisted that all Scottish laws and customs should be kept as they were in the days of King Alexander III.

[macwilkin]

...and the Understatement of the Year Award goes to... Cajunscot!



Edward I was still alive at the time, but the point is the same. John Comyn was one of the greatest defenders of Scotland. The problem was that his important allies came to terms with King Edward. He could do nothing more, and had to submit to King Edward himself. The Red Comyn insisted that all Scottish laws and customs should be kept as they were in the days of King Alexander III.

Yes, Father...I just noticed that typo on my part...passion for my subject is to blame, I suppose!

T.

[Scotus]

Aye. I can also be a bit of a zealot myself.